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    dots Submission Name: Black Tearsdots
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    Author: fireflye
    ASL Info:    15/f/cananda/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    2.16 - 11/28/20
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 834
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 803



    Description:
       black tears is what i cry!!


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    dotsBlack Tearsdots
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    black tears fall
    from my heart
    i am always crying
    on the inside

    no one understand
    what they are
    they fall freely now
    they cannot stop
    their are no tears of joy
    only sadness
    black tears will all ways
    fall and that can i live with??
    with every day feeling like my last
    all ways memories flooding
    in from the past

    depression cannot explain
    all what i am feeling maybe in
    time i will start healing
    maybe.....maybe......no

    heart emptey nothing
    left to give
    now death is
    becoming beautiful
    im not longing to live

    black is what i see
    around maybe it will stop
    maybe....maybe....no




    Submitted on 2006-11-02 21:08:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this poem is very sad...i can feel your hurt here. your spelling could be improved though.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-11-11 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice piece, I can only hope that its a work of fiction. just reading this poem makes feel kinda down, now I'll hafta read something to pick me up again. Nice... Keep'em coming.


    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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