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    dots Submission Name: Sex in heredots
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    Author: musclebound350
    ASL Info:    26/male
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 197/202/70
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1036
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    Bytes: 1833



    Description:
       random song I did


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    dotsSex in heredots
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    (sing softly)
    Rain drops______ dripping on___ the window sill
    I'm watching time go by
    the winds pick up____and I'm_____standing still
    I'm feeling it go by
    The clouds rumble_____and I____feel the wind
    I'm watching life go by


    (quicker pased, louder)
    the clouds can rain on me
    lightning can strike me down
    but nothing compares to the pain I feel

    nothing can bring me down
    cause I'm already here
    I'm screaming inside but there's no sound

    you picked me up__then pushed me down
    you gave me hope__then you gave me fear
    you have reversed every thing you've done
    you clouded my mind that you made clear

    (sing softly)
    Rain drops______ dripping on___ the window sill
    I'm watching time go by
    the winds pick up____and I'm_____standing still
    I'm feeling it go by
    Houses flying_____and I____feel the wind
    I'm watching life go by

    Nothing can hurt me like you did
    cause you tore me apart
    you cant undo what you did
    why did you break my heart

    I think about you all the time
    even in my nightmares
    constantly scaring me
    with all your horror bringing tears

    like barbwire you ripped me all to shreds
    leaving pieces here and there
    mentally in anguish
    like your embedded in my ear

    (sing softly)
    Rain drops______ dripping on___ the window sill
    I'm watching time go by
    the winds pick up____and I'm_____standing still
    I'm feeling it go by
    The clouds rumble_____and I____feel the wind
    I'm watching life go by




    Submitted on 2006-11-02 22:10:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know, this is the best thing I've read in awhile. I recently (being within a week) broke up with my boyfriend who meant the world to me... and i know what you mean when you say time passes by... i notice that when I sit on the front porch and smoke a cigerette... the world seems to pass my by.. and I just sit there... and watch.... and think. I'm gonna add this to my favs. P.S. I loved that the title really had nothing to do with the contents of the poem. Excecpt for maybe how it feels to be stuck in a stuffy house when it's raining outside.

    Much love,
    Cat
    | Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was interesting. Not at all what I thought I was getting into by the title. It could use a little bit of refining because the flow is off and it feels rather choppy. If that was what you were going for though, it is rather good. I like your word choices here. I apperciate the read and you sharing this.
    Briannan
    | Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]


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