help me

Author: CFHillyard ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 53 /36 /13 Words: 94

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help me

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my senses dull and my mind goes numb all i can think of is the gun thoughts of suicide streak through my mind everyone has left ME behind! no more hope for the future the past has become my haunting creature but here i am still alive trying to figure out what is my drive? does anyone care anymore? or have i become like a deadweight on the floor? help me now when i need it most cause its hitting me hard, the fact that no longer through life can i coast!

Submitted on 2006-11-03 00:00:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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is whats funny is the last line is the one with the most truth in it lol =P but yeah i admit it was a bit forced lol

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by CFHillyard | [ Reply to This ]

I think the last line would be good if you didn't force the rhyme. You aren't left behind. You can find people that are willing to care for you. If you ever need to talk, I'm here to isten. Katana

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

i haven't left you behind. ~boo

| Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]

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