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    dots Submission Name: Incomprehensible Tolerancedots
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    Author: dustinamoody
    ASL Info:    22/M /CALI
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 110/115/28
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 894
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    Description:
       Laying in bed with a girl who I wish was more than a friend.


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    dotsIncomprehensible Tolerancedots
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    Our platonic yet symbolic love
    Transversing through the dreams
    Of my lonely nights.
    Inert memories cloud my mind
    Lying immobilized in my dormant bed.
    Eyes transfixed on the ceiling,
    Recalling memories of days past.
    My body’s oscillations
    Concur with a perpetual timing.
    Lost in disillusional hallucinatory moments
    Acquiring knowledge of Aphrodite’s
    Incomprehensible tolerance.




    Submitted on 2006-11-03 11:44:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked thie piece. Very descriptive, almost hazey and dreamy. You can imagine the person laying there in bed, nice.
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      My first impression, that has to suck. I mean to be tempted by this girl that you are friends with and have to restrain yourself. Now do you think this girl's a goddess or something because you are talking about Aprodite? Because if you really think that highly of her you should say something... But anyway first impressions...It's good, but I think it's a little wordy, um...yeah but still good. I'm not sure exactly what to make of it. I can't say that I've ever been there done that. Sorry. Good luck with that though. ~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]


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