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Author: CFHillyard ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 53 /36 /13 Words: 82

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I am a demon in disguise always looking up at blood red skies nothing comforts me or holds me dear my life is wrenched by my mortal fear many secrets i hide within begging the lord to forgive my sins i try my best to hide the truth constantly running from the sleuth so here i am just like you a lonely mortal nothing new take my hand if you dare ill try my best to show i care

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this is good. sounds kinda dark and menacing to begin with. the rhythm and rhyme are excellent. this is a great piece! michelle

| Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

Again, I applaud you're skills as a writer. I like the end as well. The last two lines make it have more meaning. Katana

| Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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