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    dots Submission Name: medots
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    Author: CFHillyard
    ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state
    Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 53/36/13
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 656
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       just a new one iv written


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    I am a demon in disguise
    always looking up at blood red skies
    nothing comforts me or holds me dear
    my life is wrenched by my mortal fear

    many secrets i hide within
    begging the lord to forgive my sins
    i try my best to hide the truth
    constantly running from the sleuth

    so here i am just like you
    a lonely mortal nothing new
    take my hand if you dare
    ill try my best to show i care




    Submitted on 2006-11-03 15:43:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is good. sounds kinda dark and menacing to begin with. the rhythm and rhyme are excellent.
    this is a great piece!
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, I applaud you're skills as a writer. I like the end as well. The last two lines make it have more meaning.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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