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    dots Submission Name: I think I'm alone with this knife in the darkdots

    Author: Burning_Heart
    ASL Info:    21/f/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 5/12/41
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsI think I'm alone with this knife in the darkdots

    I think I'm alone
    With this knife in the darkness
    Then I hear the phone
    It rings three times

    There is a knife in my hand
    That holds relife to this pain
    I hold it up high and drop down to my wrist
    Blood start driping like hard rain

    My eyes rolls backward
    And my heart starts to beat faster
    Darkness fills the cold room
    And then I start to breath harder

    My blood is all over the place
    It drops
    Something inside
    Won't let it just stop

    My head goes light
    And brightness starts to fade
    My arms go weak
    And then I take out the blade

    I sit up
    I'm still not dead
    I stand up
    And fall back on my bed

    Submitted on 2006-11-03 16:53:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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