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    dots Submission Name: Unspoken Wordsdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 768
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This poem is orignaly Wrote by a friend


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    dotsUnspoken Wordsdots
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    Words left unsaid,
    untocuhed,
    yet still felt,
    need to be spoken,
    need to be heard,
    not even a whisper is spoken,
    words with no meanings
    words with out heart,
    silence
    but pain
    sitting still waiting
    nothing will happen
    no words are spoken,
    only thoughts lingering in the air
    dreams are broken
    homes are gone,
    futures are ruined
    just by not staying those words.




    Submitted on 2006-11-03 17:03:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this, it managed to be a very often discussed topic, while looking at it in a different light that made it new and open. The only thing I didn't like, was the one line "but pain", I took it out in my head and it seemed to flow better. Also, the last line is a bit long for an end it seems, but maybe it's just how I read it. Overall I really liked this.
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      Little pieces of a whole that make this poem atmospherical are very vivid and pour into the gloom of the words. Great!
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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