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    dots Submission Name: Languagedots
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    Author: Fougene
    ASL Info:    17/m/Saskatoon Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 23/22/39
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 640
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       One of my favourite poems I've ever written. Quite proud of it.


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    dotsLanguagedots
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    The most beautiful apostrophe I've seen
    Was that radiant complexion walking in
    The most heart-moving pair of parenthesis
    Was those defining eyebrows curved towards me
    The most sensible semicolons
    Were those dark hazel eyes
    And perhaps the creation of a whole new language
    Would be her beauty

    The longest noun
    Is her black hair flowing behind her
    The most descriptive adjective
    Is her full smile beaming towards me
    The most useful verb
    Is her subtle voice talking to me
    And I wish with all articles of my heart
    The conjunction of our hands as we walk

    All is too good for a literary man
    To behold the personification of pronouns
    Bespeaking the tetrameter of prepositions
    To hear the onomatopoeia of free verse
    Is a rhyme of my past-participle passion
    For a walking metaphor of love




    Submitted on 2006-11-03 21:11:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've never seen this kind of poetry before...it's amazing...it's literate yet soulful and full of emotion all at the same time...I love how you used literary terms to help you describe the beauty of this woman...I wish someone would write something like this about me...kisses~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      And perhaps the creation of a whole new language
    Would be her beauty
    Those are my favorite lines. It's amazing how you made a connection between those two unrelated things. Genius.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      This is simply amazing! I can't argue with anything written here, except I have a similar one except using mathematics ><, but it isn't published.
    Cheers!
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      A superbly written work of art! This poem possesses clarity, imagery and cohesiveness. I like the metaphors you use comparing grammatical punctuation to the physical beauty of a woman. A very creative form, filtering life through a poet's len. Please stop by to read my poety collection. You should publish this piece! Do you write professionally? Well, I am just a novice.
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
      A superbly written work of art! This poem possesses clarity, imagery and cohesiveness. I like the metaphors you use comparing grammatical punctuation to the physical beauty of a woman. A very creative form, filtering life through a poet's len. Please stop by to read my poety collection.
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]


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