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    dots Submission Name: Before I slidedots
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    Author: Truancy
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       My first attempt at a villanelle. The emotional tone moves from sarcastic and caustic to pleading and vulnerable. Need help mostly with meter and form related content ideas.


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    Dark recesses are mine forever more
    These crayons from my youth, I cannot share:
    So please your eyes and hands, pry and explore.

    Drum my fingers across the wooden door
    But finger grooves catch me unaware:
    Dark recesses are mine forever more.

    The muscles memories ingrain the sore
    Pattern-cramps connected to my affair:
    So please your eyes and hands, pry and explore.

    The change when shadows remove the contour
    And imagination manages my stare:
    Dark recesses are mine forever more.

    My fingerprints become wrinkles that store
    Hallow spaces of an unnamed nightmare:
    So please your eyes and hands, pry and explore.

    I need your eyes that I wholly adore
    And your fingers between mine to prepare:
    Dark recesses are mine forever more
    So please, your eyes and hands pry and explore.




    Submitted on 2006-11-03 23:15:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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