Description: This is a (Creative writing) assignment. Obviously or not, we were supposed to be writing a "description" about our soul. This popped out. I know it's very depressing. I didn't mean to. I swear. But I kinda looked at it and went, "nah, that's cool. PRINT."
There are many things I cannot say.There are many things I cannot do.I related to those lines and this made me think of the color of my soul which is like ocean water blue but it reflects pain but wants to give love.Wwhen you say your soul is taped to your fingertips I believe that b/c Our souls and spirits are nothing on this earth without our bodies.You did the right thing by writing this one.So I believe you would still say you made a good piece without you knowing it which is a little funny to me. 5stars from me.You've earned it. RG
I thinks theres an interesting idea here in this poem. I do think the ideas in it are a little scattered, going from tape, to colors, to contradiction. While the theme of the poem, your soul, is apparent by the repetition of the word, it doesn't seem quite...connected. Do you get what I'm trying to say? I guess it's good for a quick write for an assignment, but it doesn't seem to have much thought or emotion behind it.
The visual of "my soul is taped to my fingers" is most definitely extremely creative. It was an excellent hook. The entire poem didn't measure up the the expectations the opening line set, but it was good. Not great, but good.
This a very intresting and a good one, I love your opening lines. I don't think its depressing at all, its like you have alot of energy that you're harnessing. Without the tape you're soul would just get lost because of its nature to experience everything. Sometimes we have to ground ourselves so we can participate in the everyday.