my retreat

Author: CFHillyard ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 53 /36 /13 Words: 129

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my retreat

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alcohol is my retreat its where i go when i sense defeat broken is my will to care never my thoughts can i share does it matter that i drink? do you care what i think? help me then to end this drain its ruining my life and driving me insane drunk again no reason why never the power to stand up to try for i am as weak as a mouse trapped inside this haunted house so wake me up from this daze let me know that im in a craze cause i cant admit what i cannot see and ill never see what i dont want to be im a drunk and it is true iv nothing left but YOU save me babe

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You've penned a good look at all alcohol does to a person's life. The word "alcohol" is misspelled, but that seemed appropriate in a poem dealing with the effects alcohol has on the brain's power to think. Pen on, Sharon

| Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

Addictions are bad. Thank God I never started any. xD Yeah. Hope you can end the alcahol addiction. If you still have it/ever had it. -- Jason Clement

| Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]

Alcohol is never the answer to anyone's problems. It only makes matters worse. Break the addiction and you will feel like a new man that can do anything. Katana

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

aww this makes me think of my boyfriend. i try to keep him away from that stuff cause i care about him, but i don't want him thinking i'm trying to control him...ya know. well good write. keep up the great work. </3 lisa

| Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

My Friend this is a very true and great write I know the felling you are describing because I was addicted to Crystal Meth for 5 years I am now Clean and sober for a year and a half THANK GOD This write I feel is a very strong write where you are reaching out for help The only advice I would give is Please realize noone can help ypu end an addiction You have to do that yourself I know you can do ot!!! If you ever need a shoulder to lean on or a Friend to just listen to what you have to say Im always here Just pm me God Bless Ron

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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