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my retreat


Author: CFHillyard
ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state
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Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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what can i say about this one...its what i wrote while drinking lol


my retreat



alcohol is my retreat
its where i go when i sense defeat
broken is my will to care
never my thoughts can i share

does it matter that i drink?
do you care what i think?
help me then to end this drain
its ruining my life and driving me insane

drunk again no reason why
never the power to stand up to try
for i am as weak as a mouse
trapped inside this haunted house

so wake me up from this daze
let me know that im in a craze
cause i cant admit what i cannot see
and ill never see what i dont want to be
im a drunk and it is true
iv nothing left but YOU

save me babe




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  You've penned a good look at all alcohol does to a person's life. The word "alcohol" is misspelled, but that seemed appropriate in a poem dealing with the effects alcohol has on the brain's power to think. Pen on, Sharon
| Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  Addictions are bad. Thank God I never started any. xD

Yeah. Hope you can end the alcahol addiction. If you still have it/ever had it.

-- Jason Clement
| Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
  Alcohol is never the answer to anyone's problems. It only makes matters worse. Break the addiction and you will feel like a new man that can do anything.
Katana
| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  aww this makes me think of my boyfriend. i try to keep him away from that stuff cause i care about him, but i don't want him thinking i'm trying to control him...ya know. well good write. keep up the great work.
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
  My Friend this is a very true and great write
I know the felling you are describing because I was addicted to Crystal Meth for 5 years
I am now Clean and sober for a year and a half THANK GOD
This write I feel is a very strong write where you are reaching out for help
The only advice I would give is Please realize noone can help ypu end an addiction
You have to do that yourself
I know you can do ot!!!
If you ever need a shoulder to lean on or a Friend to just listen to what you have to say Im always here
Just pm me
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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