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    dots Submission Name: my retreatdots
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    Author: CFHillyard
    ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state
    Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 53/36/13
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 724
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       what can i say about this one...its what i wrote while drinking lol


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    dotsmy retreatdots
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    alcohol is my retreat
    its where i go when i sense defeat
    broken is my will to care
    never my thoughts can i share

    does it matter that i drink?
    do you care what i think?
    help me then to end this drain
    its ruining my life and driving me insane

    drunk again no reason why
    never the power to stand up to try
    for i am as weak as a mouse
    trapped inside this haunted house

    so wake me up from this daze
    let me know that im in a craze
    cause i cant admit what i cannot see
    and ill never see what i dont want to be
    im a drunk and it is true
    iv nothing left but YOU

    save me babe




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      You've penned a good look at all alcohol does to a person's life. The word "alcohol" is misspelled, but that seemed appropriate in a poem dealing with the effects alcohol has on the brain's power to think. Pen on, Sharon
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Addictions are bad. Thank God I never started any. xD

    Yeah. Hope you can end the alcahol addiction. If you still have it/ever had it.

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
      Alcohol is never the answer to anyone's problems. It only makes matters worse. Break the addiction and you will feel like a new man that can do anything.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this makes me think of my boyfriend. i try to keep him away from that stuff cause i care about him, but i don't want him thinking i'm trying to control him...ya know. well good write. keep up the great work.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      My Friend this is a very true and great write
    I know the felling you are describing because I was addicted to Crystal Meth for 5 years
    I am now Clean and sober for a year and a half THANK GOD
    This write I feel is a very strong write where you are reaching out for help
    The only advice I would give is Please realize noone can help ypu end an addiction
    You have to do that yourself
    I know you can do ot!!!
    If you ever need a shoulder to lean on or a Friend to just listen to what you have to say Im always here
    Just pm me
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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