This is a good little piece, how old were you when you wrote it? I've been reading alot of your works and I've noticed that you're really good at rhyming. I used to try and rhyme alot but now I dont really worry about rhyming, I feel that it limits me too much and I also think that it dosnt matter so much because if your poem gets translated into another language it wouldnt rhyme anyway. I guess I just wanted to tell you that because perhaps you could try something other than your norm. and grow as an artist.