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    dots Submission Name: The River's Storydots

    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I found this in an old journal of mine.I must of wrote it along time ago.

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    dotsThe River's Storydots

    The water rambled
    As it scrambled
    Showing unknown wrath
    Traveling it's chosen path

    It tells a story as it moves
    Moving as powerful horses' hooves
    It gracefully dances
    Almost prances
    Towards it's onward goal

    It plunders rushing
    Joyfully gushing
    As the rapids flow

    The moon reflects
    Like golden specks
    On the waters edge

    Tredging toeards its destined place
    At ia timely pace
    Running a seemingly untimed race

    On a wayward night
    What a glorious sight
    As it travels on

    Submitted on 2006-11-04 14:37:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good little piece, how old were you when you wrote it? I've been reading alot of your works and I've noticed that you're really good at rhyming. I used to try and rhyme alot but now I dont really worry about rhyming, I feel that it limits me too much and I also think that it dosnt matter so much because if your poem gets translated into another language it wouldnt rhyme anyway. I guess I just wanted to tell you that because perhaps you could try something other than your norm. and grow as an artist.
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by chemberdan | [ Reply to This ]

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