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    dots Submission Name: I Want To Bedots
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    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1186



    Description:
       My friends and I had this competition on who could write the best love song. We made this really cool music for it to.


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    dotsI Want To Bedots
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    I want to be loved
    I want to be missed
    I want to be hugged
    I want to be kissed

    Wrap your arms around me
    Baby you have found me
    So long I've been locked inside myself
    You saw right through the bars
    And let me out

    You'll never know how much

    I wanted to be loved
    I wanted to be missed
    I wanted to be hugged
    I wanted to be kissed

    All my hope was washed away
    As my life began to fray
    Now here you are
    And I must stay
    Here you are
    Please will you stay

    You'll never know how much

    I need you to love me
    Through and through
    No matter what I do

    I need you to miss me
    When I say good bye
    Until I come back and look into your eyes

    I need you to hug me
    When I'm down
    Just lift my spirits off the ground

    I need you to kiss me
    Because when we kiss
    I know your made for me
    And I am made for you

    And I am made for youuuuu







    Submitted on 2006-11-04 15:45:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was good. I really liked the chorus. Man, it bugs me that I can't hear the music that goes along with it.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]


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