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Future teller


Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Future teller



With you I want to spend my life
With you I want to walk the aisle
With you I want to walk the road
Your hand’s the one I want to hold

I know the future I can’t tell
And though I want you last and first
There is one thing that I can tell
There’s no one else in this whole world
That’ll have my heart just for himself

I love you doesn’t fell enough
To explain what is inside this soul
You’ve captured me like sword in stone
And I know here’s where I belong

No need to worry about the day
That’ll come when night comes to an end
I want to fight for you today
So that tomorrow never ends




Submitted on 2006-11-04 23:16:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a great work, i like this part most

With you I want to spend my life
With you I want to walk the aisle
With you I want to walk the road
Your hand' s the one I want to hold

Hmm i never heard there is future teller exist, i mean i think it is usually called fortune teller rite? I have read this several times but i still confuse about the last part

I want to fight for you today
So that tomorrow never ends

what is that actually mean? Overall you have a good rhyme except the 2nd and 3rd stanza, i wonder if you have the time to fix it, i believe it will be more beautiful. Also the 2nd stanza is consist more than 4 lines.

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~ David ~
| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]


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