Future teller

Author: rachel gless ASL Info:    23/f/mx Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37 Words: 128

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Future teller

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With you I want to spend my life With you I want to walk the aisle With you I want to walk the road Your hand’s the one I want to hold I know the future I can’t tell And though I want you last and first There is one thing that I can tell There’s no one else in this whole world That’ll have my heart just for himself I love you doesn’t fell enough To explain what is inside this soul You’ve captured me like sword in stone And I know here’s where I belong No need to worry about the day That’ll come when night comes to an end I want to fight for you today So that tomorrow never ends

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This is a great work, i like this part most With you I want to spend my life With you I want to walk the aisle With you I want to walk the road Your hand' s the one I want to hold Hmm i never heard there is future teller exist, i mean i think it is usually called fortune teller rite? I have read this several times but i still confuse about the last part I want to fight for you today So that tomorrow never ends what is that actually mean? Overall you have a good rhyme except the 2nd and 3rd stanza, i wonder if you have the time to fix it, i believe it will be more beautiful. Also the 2nd stanza is consist more than 4 lines. Take Care ~ David ~

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]

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