Bleeding

Author: Bobby Torres ASL Info:    14/Male/Los Angeles Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1 /3 /11 Words: 14

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Bleeding

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While i dream awake, my beating heart screams. i'm bleeding on the inside.

Submitted on 2006-11-05 00:16:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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well its definately short, not much to it so not much to comment to? is there anything more or is that the end of the story? just wondering Vynom

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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