If you love me, don't set me free -------------------------------------------
If you love me, don't set me free
Cage me or I will fly away unseen
Peel away my shattered wings
They have only led to disastrous things
Reveal the pink undertones of my skin
Bind me once again
I long so much for a feeling of protection
Some form of connection
Eradicate the means of my addiction
Don't argue with me
Just provide the needed restrictions
I don't need some space
Or to be let out on my own
Clothe me in your warm arms
And at last I can have a home
I really enjoy this, mainly because of the fact that I HATE that saying "If you love something, set it free, blah blah blah" because it's so terribly cliché and monotonous. Thank you for stating what I always think, and in a non-cliché and descriptive way. This is really lovely.
Plus,
thank you for all the lovely comments you left. They made me happy :]
I like this free-looking but actually very ordered verseform. Also - I just read 'Barricade' which had some screwed-up punctuation, but this poem works wonderfully without any punctuation marks at all because you must have been in the mood to sing a little as well as just writing down concepts! This poem tells me how to read it, because of the organized although complex rhythm. I'm sure you have a talent for poetry because these skills just come out even though you don't seem to know much about them! I guess everybody here has talent, because that's what would make us love poetry in the first place? Pardon my philosophy ...
'disastrous' ...'eradicate'. No, not the poem - just those spellings!
Ditto, it's so well constructed, such a simple format, yet so much meaning behind each line. The need to be loved and held close, it's unabashedly lovely! Undoutedly and masterfully written *nods* big words for a little person, you did great!
simple n beautiful n its nice a girl wants a guy to treat her like tat i wuld love to have a girl like her lol...so u dont want wings want to be caged n dont want ur own space me or my fren wuld be interested lol j/k nice poem keep it up luv, sean
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