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    dots Submission Name: If you love me, don't set me freedots

    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsIf you love me, don't set me freedots

    If you love me, don't set me free
    Cage me or I will fly away unseen
    Peel away my shattered wings
    They have only led to disastrous things
    Reveal the pink undertones of my skin
    Bind me once again
    I long so much for a feeling of protection
    Some form of connection
    Eradicate the means of my addiction
    Don't argue with me
    Just provide the needed restrictions
    I don't need some space
    Or to be let out on my own
    Clothe me in your warm arms
    And at last I can have a home

    Submitted on 2006-11-05 10:24:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoy this, mainly because of the fact that I HATE that saying "If you love something, set it free, blah blah blah" because it's so terribly cliché and monotonous. Thank you for stating what I always think, and in a non-cliché and descriptive way. This is really lovely.

    thank you for all the lovely comments you left. They made me happy :]
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this free-looking but actually very ordered verseform. Also - I just read 'Barricade' which had some screwed-up punctuation, but this poem works wonderfully without any punctuation marks at all because you must have been in the mood to sing a little as well as just writing down concepts! This poem tells me how to read it, because of the organized although complex rhythm. I'm sure you have a talent for poetry because these skills just come out even though you don't seem to know much about them! I guess everybody here has talent, because that's what would make us love poetry in the first place? Pardon my philosophy ...

    'disastrous' ...'eradicate'. No, not the poem - just those spellings!
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Ditto, it's so well constructed, such a simple format, yet so much meaning behind each line. The need to be loved and held close, it's unabashedly lovely! Undoutedly and masterfully written *nods* big words for a little person, you did great!
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blood†Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very nice, I love the image of maybe a baby bird looking for protection.
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by A.L. Beirce | [ Reply to This ]
      simple n beautiful n its nice a girl wants a guy to treat her like tat i wuld love to have a girl like her lol...so u dont want wings want to be caged n dont want ur own space me or my fren wuld be interested lol j/k
    nice poem
    keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, really just lovely...
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Ellie Schneider | [ Reply to This ]

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