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I AM CHANGING


Author: CFHillyard
ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state
Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 53 /36 /13
Words: 232
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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this is the first poem i ever wrote, not my best but regardless im just happy to have it still i thought it had been lost on my old computer but just found it in my Email


I AM CHANGING



I am changing now, evolving into something new.
I am changing now, into something just for you.
I've made many mistakes in the past.
Ensuring that our love could never last.

I am a fool forgive me love i need you now as much as i need god above.
I am changing now into a man, Iv suddenly realized that i CAN.
wait for me Rachelle because being without you is like being in hell.

Things will work you will see. Just give me time to set myself free.
Iv been chained to my past always without hope but here i am at last
learning to cope.

I know iv been slow but thats before i learned after my body my mind can still grow. Now that iv watched you go i can only hope that once again to me love you shall bestow. I am changing now into someone i was scared to let you see. god how i miss you and your smiles of glee.

I am changing now dont forget me yet iv already got to much that i regret. I am here for you to the end of time with or without you you shall always be a friend of mine. I am changing now and for that i thank you your my inspiration you are MY lifes education.




Submitted on 2006-11-05 12:11:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  great peom
it is really good and it flows real nice
it one of the few peoms that dont rhyme but are still really good. i love your writing style. next time space out the lines a little better though!!
:)
~annie
| Posted on 2006-11-11 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]
  Good poem, but you need to seperate the lines to make it easier to read.
Katana

I am changing now,
evolving into something new.
I am changing now,
into something just for you.
I've made many mistakes in the past.
Ensuring that our love could never last.

I am a fool
forgive me love
i need you now
as much as i need god above.
I am changing now into a man,
Iv suddenly realized that i CAN.
wait for me Rachelle
because being without you
is like being in hell.

Things will work you will see.
Just give me time to set myself free.
Iv been chained to my past
always without hope
but here i am at last
learning to cope.

I know iv been slow
but thats before i learned
after my body my mind can still grow.
Now that iv watched you go
i can only hope that once again to me
love you shall bestow.
I am changing now into someone
i was scared to let you see.
god how i miss you
and your smiles of glee.

I am changing now
dont forget me yet
iv already got
to much that i regret.
I am here for you
to the end of time
with or without you
you shall always
be a friend of mine.
I am changing now
and for that i thank you
your my inspiration
you are MY lifes education.
| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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