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how can you?


Author: CFHillyard
ASL Info:    22/M/Washington state
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Words: 197
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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wrote this one a long time ago when my ex was pregnant with our first baby (We had a miscarriage though) just another i found again that i thought was lost in my old computer


how can you?



How can you do this to me?
How can you be so cruel?
How can you tell me these lies and act like im a fool.
How can you judge me when once you loved me?
How can you bait me just to find reasons to hate me?
How can you make it live without the love i have to give?
How can you say its not mine?
when you made it clear about the date and time.
How can you do this and not feel bad?
does the grief you cause me make you glad.
How can you still want to fight?
when all i want is to know its all going to be alright.
How can you do this alone?
when you know im waiting here at home.
How can you say without a dad you did fine?
when you KNOW it still pains you all the time.
How can you wish it upon someone new?
someone destined to be close to you.
How can you be so irate over something that I DO have the right to debate?
How can you be so mad and I can be only sad?
HOW CAN YOU???




Submitted on 2006-11-05 12:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow I like this one. I like the emotion you portray. The whole "why" topic is great. I love the choppiness of the flow. Kinda brings it together in an odd way. Hope 2 read more from you and thank you for the comment!


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}i{Renae}i{
| Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
  I hope things go alright for you. Sad poem you have here.
Katana
| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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