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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots

    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Surrounded by people
    While inside so alone
    Tell me why I feel so lost
    Like I can't find my way
    Through this dense crowd
    Looking for... something

    It has no name or form
    But I know that I need it
    My soul cries out for it
    Getting no answer back
    It shrinks in silent defeat
    Against that which may not exist

    I'm stuck looking for it
    A figment of my imagination
    Perhaps a wisp of illusion
    Created to drive me insane
    With symptoms of withdrawals
    Of an addiction I once had

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      NICE! I feel this one. I think this is something that everyone experiances. To me, I beleive that we all are looking for something and that something is a purpose. Not just a purpose but The Purpose, of why we are here. sometimes in our journies to find that purpose we feel alone no matter how many people are around. You, however, are not alone. As I said, we all have this same feeling at one point in another and some times we never find that purpose. Just always remember You are not alone.

    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Shadowmeld | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm stuck looking for it
    A figment of my imagination
    Perhaps a wisp of illusion
    Created to drive me insane

    Why do I understand that so well...? Oddly enough, this is the first poem I've read today that I don't have complaints...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      although i may not comment on all your writings so far i seem to understand and to be able to compaire myself witht hem all.. and that is why i keep readin yours or anyone elses writtings. as bad as it is to say at times it feels good to know im not the only one. that im not alone! keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by CFHillyard | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful, Katanya! I especially like

    "Surrounded by people
    While inside so alone"

    This wonderful prose struggles with the eternal human question "who are we"?!
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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