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    dots Submission Name: Love as an Extra's Dilemmadots
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    Author: AptPupilofLife2
    ASL Info:    18/M/Berkeley,CA
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 112/131/48
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 170
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    Description:
       I'm kind of happy with this, though it has no real form, though it had no plan. it just started. and there it is.

    we've all had a passing glance shared with someone who we knew wasn't free. And we told ourselves it couldn't work. it didn't fit. and we always kept walking. or most of us did. and that's how this poem started. and then it just started changing as i wrote. and you see where it ended.

    now i'm waiting for life to imitate art.


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    dotsLove as an Extra's Dilemmadots
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    The problem with a story is it makes you believe things.
    Things which you can’t have.
    Things which you know you can’t have.
    Because everything outside you tells you so.
    Because you never had them before.
    Because you can’t.

    And the problem with belief is,
    It has nothing to do with what’s outside you.
    So how do you choose?

    Well, the choice is always the same.
    You do what the rest of the world says.
    Because the thing about stories is,
    They have a protagonist.
    They have a center.

    But in life, who can claim to be the center?
    So you do what the rest of the world asks,
    What the rest of the world commands.
    Because in the eyes of most of the world,
    You’re a peripheral.
    An extra.
    A shadow passing in front of a camera which isn’t even focused on you.

    But you know the first rule about acting?
    There are no small parts, only small actors.
    And when you look inside, you don’t feel like a small actor,
    You don’t feel like a character at all.
    You feel like an epic,
    A woven tapestry of fates and dreams and loves and freeze framed moments.

    Because the other thing about life is, there’s a camera on all of us.




    Submitted on 2006-11-05 14:22:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Allow me to formally rewrite my comment.

    From what I gather, this is one of those justified trips that you normally would feel guilty about, but just got so caught up in your own things that you stopped caring about the rightness and the wrongness and just felt like going all out for what would make you happy. Under normal circumstances one would think that this is stupid and possibly the most hypocritical thing you could do. But, considering that you are probably in a dark room all alone with nobody to see or judge what you will be doing on this one, you are allowing yourself the liberty of "being you." One of the underlying problems to that feeling though, is the lack of integrity it implies, and how it simply reflects the phony thing you are supposedly avoiding by doing all of this - the phony lies and dictations of the society around you. Of course everybody is under the scope of a camera, but most of the time the camera is their conscience because we have such things and guilt, guilty byproducts - pleasures and sadnesses - and pride related things. What you have to realize in all of this is that, you are messed up either way because you are never being yourself thanks to society. You are ressorting to darker pleasures, or so you say they are called darker by the outside world. But understand that, you are only blaming them because it suits whichever purpose is your own.

    But besides the whole analysis of the underlying theme, I think this piece was a little shortcoming in it's punctuation - which I personally favor in pieces to not asphyxiate, but oh well - and the capitales are a little off the hook and over done. Possibly exploiting simple sentences like "An extra" for their true potential... But those are just suggestion of my affinities, and they'd add to this piece FOR ME. Maybe not you and others... So heed my suggestion if you agree with them, otherwise it was a good write, and as you can see it stirred up some thoughts.

    Outlaw
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]



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