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    dots Submission Name: Voicesdots
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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 650
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1046



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       psycho!!!!!!!!!!!


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    dotsVoicesdots
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    Hello,
    are you out there?
    I need someone to talk to,
    who i dont care.
    I did it,
    i commited a crime.
    The voices they stopped talking,
    at the most unopprotune time.
    Blood has been spilt,
    and i am to blame.
    The voices the made me,
    and they made me insane.
    Concious or curse,
    friens or my foes.
    They can speak with no faces,
    and smell fear with no nose.

    There gone now,
    and i dont know why.
    I did what they wanted,
    and they left me to die.
    Alone in my room,
    lights all turned down.
    Gun in my hand,
    and wearing a frown.
    Prepared for the end,
    sweat on my face.
    Biting my lip,
    bloods all itaste.
    Not fearing my death,
    just feeling anxious.
    I see the face of my friend,
    he shall remain nameless.
    That look on his face,
    and the hole in his chest.
    Brought the pull of the trigger,
    and my un-ending rest.




    Submitted on 2006-11-05 17:15:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      loved it, especially
    "i commited a crime.
    The voices they stopped talking,
    at the most unopprotune time."

    wonderful tho it seemed a tinsy bit akaward in the begaining i think that added to the feel of the poem. like a shaky start to a great race.
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      OH MY GAWD ITS THE SILENCED POET!

    yo kool poem. this part is awsome

    The voices the made me,
    and they made me insane.
    Concious or curse,
    friens or my foes.
    They can speak with no faces,
    and smell fear with no nose



    they made me do it. it was the voices fault.

    Peace






    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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