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    dots Submission Name: simple pleasure works best.dots
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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
    Total Views: 1002
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    will the incessant mulch of blue laced leafscum
    cling on; to velvet trouser?

    in a very different way to the brightcloud puddles of yesterday;glassy, turvytop peepholes

    i dont mind in flight past the olduns and the
    race is on
    breathless tizzy
    ingesting sweet azure skies that promise
    so well
    the forwarding of grey-sting
    and so propell
    me further,wanton,progress like a shoot
    autumn never moot,nor mute, for that matter
    delivering pin-prick notes that i gobble and devour,
    adding them to my bow-string
    pearling a ditty
    love itself knitting

    the veins languish
    and turn to crunch
    jumping off the wheels
    i reflect that
    its the only way to go.





    Submitted on 2006-11-06 09:35:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's the only way to go? what kind of ending is that? I want my nickel back. I didn't pay for the performance? Oh. I know sillohetes don't regret syphining light from sun scoarched skies or trying to pigment us in one shaded
    discussing jade and other semi-precious stones alone with a nome in the garden
    hardened by the fact the conversation is onesided
    And alas I am alone
    Impoverished hungry from a few days without food
    Sweat exudes from unwashed clothng and dirty plates balancing oh so cleverly as they spill from the cluttered sink
    taking apart the parts of the microwave I don't own and rearanging the cognatively so I won't be bored
    Boared up windows are supossed to keep the heat in or cold air out
    Undoubtably empty like the half empty two litter bottles of diet Dr. pepper lining the lenolium and covering the ugly brown shag carpet
    pet stained with urine and fecese
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]


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