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    dots Submission Name: jack..or anyone.dots
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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Satire
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    Bytes: 387



    Description:
       nourish yourSelf.


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    dotsjack..or anyone.dots
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    flicking bonbons,clacking against my curly toothpegs
    could almost equate to

    the glitter-spattered knowing
    of not knowing anything much

    especially coupled with
    the thought of
    your
    big
    bones
    crushing me into tangy juice

    distilling my essence

    scenting the room when i am not there




    Submitted on 2006-11-06 09:46:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the language in this is very... rhythmic and joyful, serene yet jumpy, reflective and idiosyncratic. your line breaks, enjambment and lack of punctuation works wonderfully in this; i always love it when it all fits and flows together: a complete picture, yet blurry in that way emotive imagery seems to me.

    this scene made me picture snuggling up to a lover on the couch, watching television and eating bonbons, or perhaps wanting this big-boned fella to be there with you as you idle away in philosophic thoughts... yup.

    this is so exuberant and adrift.
    lovely.
    | Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really clever
    To me you are describing how something must feel as we devour it chewing before it enters our system to provide nourishment for our body
    I have never read a write tackling this topic and must admit you did it very well
    Excellent Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    I have just added 2 new ones today
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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