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    dots Submission Name: Suicide: The Tested Trial of Releasedots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 593/819/331
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
    Total Views: 118
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1694



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       Bash it, hate it, disreagard it, I don't give a shit...Suicide is a better way out of things...It cures, and helps, for the ones who actually do it...So go ahead...leave a damn comment that hates it...I don't give a shit...


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    dotsSuicide: The Tested Trial of Releasedots
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    Fall to conviction,
    Look around,
    Trapped inside my created prison,
    Fallen to deep, all hopes never found...

    Deep breath,
    Nothing ends up the way it should,
    Awaking from eternall rest,
    Is harder than I thought it could.


    And now I see the reflection,
    The dark side of the mirror.
    Visions stir the blurred obsession,
    Of what brought us all to tears...

    The hits taken,
    The poision in ones veins.
    Keeps my mind forbidden,
    From what makes it insane...

    Now listen to the music,
    Hear the harmony take you far from here,
    From the world that made you sick,
    That held every single unheard tear.

    Mommy dosen't know,
    And Daddy will never care,
    Of the place that you're about to go,
    Praying to heaven, but it just dosn't care...

    You tried to make it easy,
    You tried to make everything right,
    But you continue to say no one will save me,
    And you just can't make it through tonight...

    The feelings have been tempting,
    The thoughts in your mind, an urge so vitale.
    Now your world has become so empty,
    That you have nothing, nothing at all...

    The hurt continues,
    But no one is there,
    Draw the line, bring it out of you,
    Place an end to this life thats so unfare...

    Cry, just cry one more night alone,
    Then swallow every pill whole,
    Soon you'll reach upon a new home,
    And enjoy the life that heaven had stole...






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      Wow. Is this really about a child? I found myself thinking what [censored]s the parents must have been to be no source of comfort to this child. The parents should be punished, not the poor innocent child.
    And while the child seems to think he alone created his nightmare world, this seemed wrong. We are not alone.
    Again I tried to imagine-it wasn't clear exactly what it was that made the child feel he wanted to stop living. The child also assumed life after death will be better than his life on earth, but no one really knows that is the case. I think that's a popular Christian motif.
    But, indeed thinks could actually be quite a bit worse. Use your imagination. Read Dante's Inferno (for one).
    I wanted to save the child, comfort the child. Let him know that ALL things shall pass.
    And fear he may be too young to understand just how final death really is. It takes some life experience to understand that.
    For instance, sometimes children understand this after a pet dies.
    Death is so very, very final.
    Those were my first thoughts.
    Very deep and imaginative write!
    -az
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by azure_warrior | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very depressing. Is this how you feel or are you just writing about the idea. Because if you have ever had anyone you loved commit suicide, you would know that that is not the easy way out. Because you may think that no one cares but someone always does. I've seen too many people I love do this to be able to agree with you at all. My uncle comitted suicide in May 2000, and what he did to my family and his two young sons is just so incomprehensibly hard to understand.I understand that people get depressed and feel like there's nothing left to live for. But there is always something. I understand that things may seem bleak and that life seems too hard to take but Jesus Christ people just need to open their eyes and see that not everything is about them.~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]



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