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    dots Submission Name: Lonely Dancerdots

    Author: uonlyknew
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 14/14/18
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is a story somewhat about what happened to me. Watching the person you love dance with someone else, but it can also be interpreted differently.

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    dotsLonely Dancerdots

    Lonely dancer,
    Spinning round,
    Spinning fast,
    but losing ground.

    Little girl,
    sitting lost,
    crying tears,
    all lines crossed.

    Dying note,
    sweet and low,
    wearing out
    the ending show.

    Peering eyes,
    looking hard,
    searching skin,
    for parts unscarred.

    Piercing voice,
    singing clear,
    building walls
    to hide the fear.

    closing doors,
    slamming shut,
    forever open
    deepening ruts.

    Open arms,
    another girl,
    your arms,
    her you twirl

    Lonely dancer,
    spinning round,
    Lovely dancer,
    losing ground.

    Submitted on 2006-11-06 18:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one. I don't know that I like it as much as "Katie", but, nonetheless, I love the image that "Losing ground" gives,

    building walls
    to hide the fear.

    So true, I think we all do that to an extent. Well, I know that I do anyway.

    This is a truly lovely piece. Another one for my faves.
    Frann. x
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Effee | [ Reply to This ]

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