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    dots Submission Name: Forgive Medots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       the other day i was watching a documentary on African Kids. How they are kidnapped and brainwashed to kill. How kids over there are killed and abused and how they suffer...


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    dotsForgive Medots
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    Am i blind to the fact that this world is not a home? Couldn't i see the blood that others have bled; bodies torn up; blood fills up a new chapter in my book...the pictures say it all. there is nothing to be said.

    Shame fills me up. For i'm not thankful for living. Yet they never cried. showing tears is weakness... Showing tears might kill them.
    I look out at nature... still having no feelings of sorrow


    My eyes become terrorfied, Bodies torn up; blood fills up my cup of wine; for they are only my age; suffering all their lives & i wonder how they can live with all the pain.


    Guns being pointed to their heads. Brainwashed; as their lesson of the day will be 'Kill your brother'. as the new song of the day will be the sound of gunshots.

    and i still look at myself in the mirror; trying to see whats wrong with me. Trying to see why i don't apreciate life. Dear lord. Please Forgive me... for i'm not thankful




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      It's sad that when people look at Africa, that this is all they see. It is not a true picture of the whole of Africa, since there are many places where there is peace and prosperity, like Namibia, where I live. Even though there was bloodshed not so long ago. But this is what happens - what you reflect in your poem. It is well conceived. You must have seen terrible things in that documentary. There is genuine empathy here.

    And many of us feel like this a lot of the time- like we are not thankful for living while others suffer. It's a human condition. We can't look past our own selfishness.

    It's sad that all African states are power hungry and the children are the ones to suffer. we should all pray for peace and human rights to prevail.

    As a fortunate African child, I thank you for this piece and for the the warm thoughts you echo across our continent. Maybe with more happy thoughts, all African children will one day smile and be happy to be free.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by K | [ Reply to This ]


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