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    dots Submission Name: No God, Damn YOU.dots
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    Author: screamALEX
    ASL Info:    19/M/PA
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 40/93/49
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1450
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       This is not anti-christ, or anti-anything, so don't. I respect other people's beliefs, so respect mine to not believe.


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    dotsNo God, Damn YOU.dots
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    No God, Damn YOU.

    Dear GOD,
    In black and white, she told me to pray.
    And pray I will,
    pray for these end of days.

    Wisped away on these beautiful sins.
    Knocking on my door again, I wonít let him in.
    The false hope you gave me fills this pain
    Crumbling fingers sealed your fate.
    Donít touch me jesus, get away.

    A boy is scared, heís lost sight
    Hold him close, show him the light
    Give him the strength to stay alive
    The strength that slowly kills him inside
    Tell me, if he stopped believing,
    would you still be as forgiving?
    Would you look with judging eyes,
    if he just fucked and lied?

    Come on back down to this blessed ground
    Tread lightly on the water, donít you drown
    Another dead prophet to bring forth the masses,
    that weíve long been waiting for.
    One more crime made possible with time,
    yet we beg for more.
    Donít preach,
    Iíve heard enough fallacies to make a whore cry.
    Donít mind me, Iím just one in a very long line.

    I am my own God.
    I choose my own fate.
    This is NOT my time of dying.
    I have nothing to fear except the living.
    Faith wonít stop the blood from flowing.
    Your book will never stop a bullet.
    I will never believe even if I see it.
    Your acceptance wonít give me back the countless hours,
    spent kneeling.
    Sitting on those cold wooden pews,
    longing for something to believe in.

    Her name is lost somewhere in my memory,
    But I remember she wore time harshly.
    In black and white, she told me to pray.
    And pray I will,
    for these end of days.




    Submitted on 2006-11-06 21:14:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Iíve heard enough fallacies to make a whore cry."
    i think that is a very interesting line, i like it

    "Would you look with judging eyes,
    if he just [censored]ed and lied?"
    this part made me laugh, honestly, seriously, and out loud
    i love this part....cynicism is the new black

    "Her name is lost somewhere in my memory,
    But I remember she wore time harshly."
    this is pretty and sad and makes methink of my irish catholic grandmother, a firm believer....

    this is a lovely and intruiging piece
    it makes me think, and sad, and happy
    all at once
    I think you have a great talent, and such intelligence,not all love and sex and [censored], like so many others (including me, i admit)
    this makes me so happy to be on this site, it shoes that there is something worthwhile out there, someone trying to be their own person instead of a sheep and i admire that so very deeply
    wonderfully spiffy

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, gurl am going to be as honest as i can- when i saw the words...I AM MY OWN GOD!!! wooohooo!!! my heart went papapapapapa....anyway, not to burst your bublle, am not commenting on the poem- why shd i ? what i am saying is- you have so much anger in your tone and for what ? that is the effect of no God in your life...anger, pride and well you miss everything beautiful. Anyway, it is your call, think about it before you breathe again...you do not really control your own destiny, the air you breathe you have absoultely zero control over, even your birth you did not determine saw show me how 'god' you are.... what happened? can you try to run away from truth and have peace? Well, it may look like sound like and feel like peace but dear one the peace of the world is not as Jesus gives. Take a moment and think about the things that went wrong and went right...are you blaming God for anything?...
    incidentally i began reading your poem and you said no Jesus dpn't touch me...well of course he don't force nobody, he says behold i come and stand at the door of your house and knock...if you open, he comes ain and eats with you! no forcing. about the boy... it says that the world's sin is unbelief so he cannot help you there.

    Faith in God is not easy...well if u cannot handle maybe that...but with His help you can handle...sistaaah, people have lost lives for what? a lie? a fallacy? a lunacy? No!! No one wd die for that. they have all died for truth!!

    He loves you, accepts when you get back, forgives and forgets, holds nothing against you...that is love, for God is love...check it, God loves you. Come back, mercy renews each morning....
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a write right here...
    it could provoke a whole lotta controversy... there was a time on this site (though quite a while back) when everyone was writing either "i love god and so should everyone else" pieces or "i hate god so leave me the fvck alone" pieces and it was kinda intense really...
    im glad its not so anymore.

    now me... just to get it out of the way before i get to commenting... i am a christian and i love god but there are a coupla things in this piece that i really really relate to...

    the idea that you have heard the same thing enough times to make a whore moan... i think thats how you put it... ive been jumping up and down about the same thing lately... wondering when i became so cynical or whether i have just had my eyes/ears opened or something... i dunno...
    but it leaves me disillusioned... not with god but with those who claim to be his messengers... who are like loops tracks or something...

    the idea of being your own god... that scares me... if i were my own god... yikes... i would be smitting myself ALL the time... i dont think i would be very loving or accepting of my subject (myself lol)
    its a good thing i am not my own god

    it sounds from your piece that you have done the church thing... that you have had the experience and it left you empty and still looking... i like how you manage to say your piece but not step on toes too hardly... just enough to be known perhaps... like when your right in the middle of the row at church and you NEED to pee and its the middle of the sermon and so you have to step infront of everyone and pick your way through knees and feet to get to the aisle... you know your always gonna step on a coupla toes (but then waking up sleeping parishoners is always a good thing LOLOL)

    ok... im stopping now coz this is not a real comment at all but i saw you faved on frytes page and i thought id check it out... im glad i did.
    | Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This definately could provoke alot of negativity from people but I am happy to see that only intelligent people chose to comment on this one. Personally for me, without going into too much detail, am a regular ol' guy who just happens to think that the popular religions are like greek mythology. made up stories to keep humanity in check which they failed to do especially since so much pain and death has been dished out and perpetrated by those who act in the name of God. However I actually do believe in a God and I will refer to this diety as such or just God cuz I think that the typical God is masculine in form cuz the males were in power when they dreamed "HIM" up. Women were inferior then and still are in some states. Anyway I do acknowledge a higher power and I am also open to learning new things from "spiritual" people. In my little mind God is a force with no name and I dunno much else cuz only the dead folks really know the truth and they aint gonna tell us. And all that see a white light shiit is exactly that, shiiit. I know plenty of well respected doctors who can explain that one although that is a hot topic for debate with some religious circles. Anyhoo I can't remember to the time before I was born so it is a POSSIBILITY that is what happens when we die. I'm not sayin for sure but It holds more merit in my opinion than harps and clouds for there lies reasonable doubt in that. Don't get me wrong I have plenty of friends who are christian, catholic, mormon,and other stuff. We can coexist cuz none of us are on a crusade to labotomize anyone so it works. The ability to coexist is a hard thing to do for alot of people and I feel like a necessary evil sometimes. Hey someone's gotta do it!That's why I may come off with a slight satanic stance but I am open to learn but I am not a convertible, lol. Sorry bout the long post. In conclusion...I am adding this to my favs and that is all!

    Mike
    Everyone's favorite devil next to LaVey
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      you know, people are funny like that. Something good happens and they feel that god is smiling down on them...something bad happens and people swear there must not be a god because the bad crap wouldn't have happened if he existed...then there are people that believe when bad stuff happens, they need to go to god for help, support...just a little release from the pain. which i happen to fall under.
    before my daughter died, i believed in god, just never really practiced any kind of religion in any kind of fashion. and it wasn't because i wasn't interested...moreso because i didn't want to have to change my lifestyle. then she died and all i could do was sit in those pews and pray for some sort of comfort. and when in those kinds of positions, it's hard to question is god is real. if he is not, then my daughter is just a skeleton in the ground, and honestly, i'd rather think of her being cradled in the arms of angels than in a box...i mean, i believed in god before she died, just nowhere near the level that i do now...
    now in saying all that, i'm not trying to preach to ya, or any other sort of stereotypical religious thing...this is how you feel, which by the way i must say was a very extremely well written piece...it just makes me a little sad on so many different levels...

    take care alex
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so good. You went to a catholic school didn't you...I did...but you know I know how you feel but I would give anything to just have that unrelentless, unchalenged belief that god's up their and he's watching, but i don't feel like that anymore. After some pretty bad [censored] happened in my life, I lost every [censored] ounce of faith that I had. Now I don't think he really gives a [censored] about anything. I mean now that I really think about it, if he's really so very powerful then why is their suffering in the world. I mean if he's so powerful and he loves us so much than where the hell is he? He sure as hell ain't here...So I know exactly what you are talking about. Amazing...~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I do respect your beliefs, and even though I do believe, I feel what you feel everyday. There seems like so much suffering in my life and others that I just do not know how to cope with it anymore. It is so hard, and looking to someone who is not physically there is hard. In times of suffering, I'd rather turn to someone more personal. I have prayed and prayed, but my life just seems to be a bunch of tests that I guess I must be failing because all I feel is pain, hurt, and longing. Sorry, I'm going off. It was really good, and I'm looking foward to anything else you are writing. -Angel-
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]


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