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    dots Submission Name: Emotionless Loverdots
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    Author: fabulousAMY
    ASL Info:    21/Female/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 159/159/61
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 183
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    dotsEmotionless Loverdots
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    Oh my dear, my darling,
    We once shared promises and kisses.
    We were once in love.
    The hardest part of being in love,
    Was leaving that love behind.
    Away in sunshine on the beach I left you,
    Kissing goodbye and teary eyed.
    Now I am distant, but not too distant.
    My heart longs to be touched...
    But I long for a numbness.
    So my dear, I rid myself of love.
    I counterfeit affection and adoration,
    I spread sweet words from my loose mouth.
    Each night a different boy tastes my tongue,
    A mixture of vodka and spurious fondness,
    As it gently whispers nothing in his ear.
    My looks are false and alluring,
    Eyelashes flickering up and down.
    And oh my darling, how I lay panting,
    In my bed with another boy.
    Gold sheets and glistening skin on skin,
    With pretenses of closeness and caring.
    It is something terrible but I do not apologize.
    You are not here, you are a ghost.
    No longer palpable, no longer tangible.
    I am no longer your love, your dearest.
    We are transformed,
    You are another boy, I am an emotionless whore.




    Submitted on 2006-11-06 21:51:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      When I first read your title, I deffinatly thought the plot was gonna lead to an ex who never seemed to give a [censored], but I was deffinatly wrong about that! the ending was deffinatly the best part, because everything leading up to it made me wonder why someone would constantly submit themselves to being such a slut, but with the last line it all pulled together.
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by SoftOrangeGlow | [ Reply to This ]
      man i dont even know what to say but this is quite the write thats for sure im not sure what i like about it but i know that i do good [censored] dude
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by setsuna | [ Reply to This ]
      i must be honest when i read the first few lines i thought another one of those broken hearted poems but it turned out different pretty good i like it although i think u culd use more imagery..but thats jus my opinion...and i love the ending...anyways do check out my stuff wen u have time
    ciao
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]



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