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    dots Submission Name: The Poem With No Enddots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Poem With No Enddots

    Thinking about you a smile showers my face;
    On your tender head I know each hair, naming them lace after lace.
    Your unique voice walks freely within my dreams;
    Everything you are so far fulfills me, stretching my very seams.
    Eyebrow raises leaving me tongue-tied;
    I am only along for the ride on this passion-tide.
    I canít see whatís coming next under this blindfold;
    Sight gone I still feel you accept my marigold.
    Not just any flower for the desired;
    But one in which you have inspired.
    You still have a hard time with blind trust;
    Take my hand walk with me through the angel dust.
    Oneís before left your heart stranded;
    Donít look worried Iím not merely a stand-in.
    My throatís dry everything I say is hoarse;
    Your soulís the culprit the single source.
    I tell you Iím not Romeo;
    Even though I know the words to make your heart overflow.
    Everything you say leaves me shocked and amazed;
    Paramount my mind left me dazed.
    It only means you are not unstained;
    Nor am I untrained.
    In my life you enter;
    Shooting Cupidís arrow dead center.
    I know through all this I have gained a friend;
    So, like our love this poem has no end . . . .

    Submitted on 2004-01-28 19:31:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love has a way of winding itself through and around those fortunate enough to find themselves in its spell. Indeed, true love has no end. May your love poem grow into a volume bursting at the seams! (She loved this poem, right?!) All the best, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem man, glad to see you in love finally, i like the contents of this alot, the only thing i might consider changing of anything at all would be the end rhymes, and even then i'm not sure how to even do that, i love your poem thou, this one is really realy good
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      sniff, sniff j/k. that was a very heartfelt poem, i could feel your love flowing from the screen. great job!
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]

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