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    dots Submission Name: looking through the broken glassdots

    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    20/f/around
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 205/215/100
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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       not quite sure...revised

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    dotslooking through the broken glassdots

    my prison of glass
    keeps me in.
    im just an animal in a
    cruel zoo.
    people pound on the glass
    and laugh.
    the cold, harsh sound
    of laughter
    echoes, echoes in my ears.
    i try to hide, but they
    surround my glass box.
    they laugh at my panic,
    my pain.
    in my fear, i smash
    the glass.
    a thousand broken shards
    shower the spectators.
    no one stirs.
    the horrible blood
    becomes the carpet.
    i seek to escape my
    broken cage,
    but i cant.
    my prison of guilt
    keeps me in.

    Submitted on 2006-11-07 11:09:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see the picture there and its shown clearly...but the flow isnt all there. Yah you dont have to listen, but I really do like the message it sends. Its makes me feel insecure when I read it, like being that person gives embarrasment, guilt and all these other emotions.

    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      "the horrible blood
    becomes the carpet."
    That's an awesome line, plus I like the whole "prison of guilt" thing you added at the end.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
      That's an awesome picture of how people tend to treat us. What do you feel guilt for? Let it go, turn to God. He loves you Poetic, more than anyone ever will. He will be there when everyone else has abandoned you. Awesome write. I felt the pain and anguish. Don't be afraid.
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]

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