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    dots Submission Name: This castledots
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    Author: drow
    ASL Info:    29/male/married
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 14/16/7
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThis castledots
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    You want my castle?
    Come and take it.
    Many have tried and all have failed.

    We will fight to the death.
    With our last breath we will see
    this fight to the end.

    If we lose this castle
    and all our blood has been spilt
    our fight will continue.

    No one that stays here will never rest.
    Take my castle.
    Spell our blood
    and the fire from hell
    will consume you all.

    For when the last breath has stopped,
    This castle will be consumed by darkness
    and once again it will be my castle
    and we never be defeated




    Submitted on 2006-11-07 12:00:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm. it's interesting but im not sure what kind of castle referance your going for. not that i have too, but... i like it
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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