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This castle

Author: drow
ASL Info:    29/male/married
Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 14 /16 /7
Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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This castle

You want my castle?
Come and take it.
Many have tried and all have failed.

We will fight to the death.
With our last breath we will see
this fight to the end.

If we lose this castle
and all our blood has been spilt
our fight will continue.

No one that stays here will never rest.
Take my castle.
Spell our blood
and the fire from hell
will consume you all.

For when the last breath has stopped,
This castle will be consumed by darkness
and once again it will be my castle
and we never be defeated

Submitted on 2006-11-07 12:00:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hmmm. it's interesting but im not sure what kind of castle referance your going for. not that i have too, but... i like it
| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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