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Bring The Blue Skies Back

Author:	Mud
ASL Info:	18/f/India
Elite Ratio:	2.73 - 55 /98 /57
Words:	174

Class/Type:	Misc /Misc
Total Views:	1790
Average Vote:	5.0000
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Bring The Blue Skies Back

Slip off my skin
And bathe me in dew
Wrap me in cobwebs
Cleanse my sinews

Soak me in sunlight
Till i vaporize
I'll rain down on you
From blue ribboned skies

Pour me so gently
Into blanching frost
I freeze over slowly
And all pain is lost

Whisper sweet nothings
And then i will melt
And feel all those feelings
That i've never felt

Lay me down slowly
On a fine beach of sand
We'll ride waves together
Come, take my hand

Put me on a rainbow
My soul i have sold
For i slide back to you
You're my pot of gold

String me at night
With the stars and the moon
And then serenade me
With your lilting tune

And when the sky blushes
At the break of dawn
My heart will be broken
And you will be gone

A will never find you
The world will turn black
I'll ask everyone to
Bring my blue skies back

Submitted on 2006-11-07 12:41:22 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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awww I really really loved this one!

agreeing with algol46...

| Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]

Oh, this IS really quite wonderful ... remindes me of Robert Louis Stevenson ... perfect rhyme and meter ... superb ... I loved it, absolutely loved it (in the final stanza you have "A will..." when I think you mean "I will..." bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... Michael

| Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

WOWWW. i love this so much. adding to my faves. great job

x0

| Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]

I think this is pretty good.You do a good job with the rhyming and I like some of your descriptions.The first three lines of the first verse are excellent but I don't think the fourth line matches the quality of the previous three.
Verse five is also very nice-simple but effective.I would capitalise the i's though and in the last verse,rhyming <dawn> with <gone> doesn't seem to work too well but then again I'm British so it probably sounds different in American English.
Well done on a nice write.
Cheers
A.C

| Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]

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