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Submission Name: lost hopes dots

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Author:	crazymunchkin
ASL Info:	17/f
Elite Ratio:	3.3 - 52/45/19
Words:	78

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1312
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	529

Description:
life goes on, you have to choose whether to go on too or not

lost hopes dots

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nothing to see
nothing to hear
endless abiss
yet nothing to fear
nothing to touch
no one to hold
empty suroundings
lifeless and cold
so open your eyes
arouse your lost hopes
awaken your limbs
and rise with new hopes
for pathetic you are
for staying so lost
cowaring inside yourself
content with life at no cost
move on and be seen
be heard as anew
for people like you
there are too few

Submitted on 2006-11-07 13:54:05 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Very good. Why is shadow speaking with a British accent, anyhow? We both know she's from PA...
Aside from spelling errors that would be caught by a standard word processor, this piece is well-done.

--crimson echo
| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
cheeky, but lovey if iwere you i'd only change one tinsy lil thing

arouse your lost hopes
awaken your limbs
and rise with new hopes
for pathetic you are

i'd change the last 'hopes' to something else 'dreams maybe.

othere then that i think it's a fesh idea and i love it
| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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