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    dots Submission Name: lost hopesdots
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    Author: crazymunchkin
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 52/45/19
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1289
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 529



    Description:
       life goes on, you have to choose whether to go on too or not


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    dotslost hopesdots
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    nothing to see
    nothing to hear
    endless abiss
    yet nothing to fear
    nothing to touch
    no one to hold
    empty suroundings
    lifeless and cold
    so open your eyes
    arouse your lost hopes
    awaken your limbs
    and rise with new hopes
    for pathetic you are
    for staying so lost
    cowaring inside yourself
    content with life at no cost
    move on and be seen
    be heard as anew
    for people like you
    there are too few




    Submitted on 2006-11-07 13:54:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good. Why is shadow speaking with a British accent, anyhow? We both know she's from PA...
    Aside from spelling errors that would be caught by a standard word processor, this piece is well-done.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      cheeky, but lovey if iwere you i'd only change one tinsy lil thing

    arouse your lost hopes
    awaken your limbs
    and rise with new hopes
    for pathetic you are

    i'd change the last 'hopes' to something else 'dreams maybe.


    othere then that i think it's a fesh idea and i love it
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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