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Skywriting School

Author: eliwhitneyradio
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Skywriting School

For a final project
I decided to write
a message explaining
exactly how much
I love you

That’s how smog
became a word

Submitted on 2006-11-07 14:46:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Haha, this is cute. But it's slightly too short. I think you've a great idea going on here, and if you can, expand it a little. As it is, it's like a tiny bite of chocolate, leaving me wanting more.
| Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
  Not what I thought it would be.
you even fooled me.
I'm glad it's not another name in the sky story.
poets claim to write your name in the stars.
Only to be seen drinking their dreams away
in barrs. Now don't get wrong, I like your poem.
Its different, and well done. Keep'em coming.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  This is cool...i'm not sure why, but I like it...maybe it's the simplicity of it...But I like it:)

| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]

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