Haha, this is cute. But it's slightly too short. I think you've a great idea going on here, and if you can, expand it a little. As it is, it's like a tiny bite of chocolate, leaving me wanting more.
Not what I thought it would be. you even fooled me. I'm glad it's not another name in the sky story. poets claim to write your name in the stars. Only to be seen drinking their dreams away in barrs. Now don't get wrong, I like your poem. Its different, and well done. Keep'em coming.
Submission Name: Skywriting School
