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    dots Submission Name: Cherish In Our Heartsdots
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    Author: demonickitten87
    ASL Info:    22/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 177/217/55
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 285
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I just wrote this tonight. It's about a really good friend of mine that is moving away. We were best friends ever since we were 8 years old and I will always come over to her house. Her family was like a second family to me. Then we started growing apart and now I'm barely ever going to see her anymore and I'm starting to regrete letting out friendship slip away.


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    Glancing at a precious memory,
    When we would laugh and play.
    Never dreaming of the time,
    When one will have to go away.

    Not much time had passed,
    When we grew apart.
    But we still had all the memories
    To cherish in our hearts.

    I started to head,
    down the wrong track.
    While you continuously tried,
    To lure me back.

    Now you have to move,
    Far away from here.
    I’m not sure how I feel,
    I think I’m starting to see a tear.

    Its feels that a piece of my childhood,
    Is moving along with you.
    I wish everything had remained,
    The same before we grew.

    We will still have our memories
    Of before we grew apart
    To put away,
    And cherish in our hearts.




    Submitted on 2004-05-27 23:31:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      When you say:
    I started to head,
    down the wrong track.
    the word head doesn't really fit to me, maybe the word travel, or wander??

    It's just my opinion, but when I read it, the word 'head' just didn't seem to fit the feeling that I felt you were trying to portray. Maybe it's just me?! Not at all trying to be rude, that's just what came to me.
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]



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