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    dots Submission Name: salvation in a bottledots

    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    20/f/around
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 205/215/100
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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       not really about being high. more about deadening pain with sleeping pills.

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    dotssalvation in a bottledots

    head reeling,
    inflamation of the brain.
    explosions sending you tumbling forward.
    screams from the outside,
    calling you back.
    screams on the inside,
    telling you to run.
    stumble up the stairs,
    taking two steps down
    for each step up.
    but you make it to the bathroom.
    you rip open the cabinet.
    toss away the other medications
    until you find the one you are looking for.
    your salvation in a bottle.
    close your eyes
    as you tip your head back and welcome relief.
    lay on your bed,
    letting the manufactured sleep
    soothe your aching head.

    Submitted on 2006-11-07 19:08:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this one. i can really relate to this one. I think you are a talented writer.
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      well if this poem's about being high, then it's great!
    you gotta feel high to know what high is and u sounded like u know it quite well.

    awesome name for the poem,btw!
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      just hope you don't take too much to end your life. I hope that everthing's alright there. You are not think suicide, are you? This sounds a lot like my poem "Salvation?" It's not worth it. You are not alone in how you feel about life and love, but trust me, for all the crap and mistakes and bad things that happen, life is beautiful and lovely. You just gotta look past all your burdens. Give them to Jesus, he wants to be with you. Great Write
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great depiction of sanity and freedom slowly slipping away. I can relate, a loss of control.
    "screams from the outside,
    calling you back.
    screams on the inside,
    telling you to run"
    that stands out alot, a great picture of anxiety

    And what's with these Jesus freaks trying to play fuking suicide counciler. With their frefabricated inquiry of your well being?
    Not every one who posts a poem about escaping life for a while is "suicidal"
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]

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