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"Nothing"


Author: WaxingPoetic
ASL Info:    27 ~ Louisiana
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 493 /563 /100
Words: 118
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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Description:


Pretty self explanatory


"Nothing"



I
am
heartbroken

At least twice daily people notice my meloncholic temperament and I am hit with an unwanted but expected question...

"What's wrong?"

Do they have hours to devote to listening?
Do they own an acre of trees for the amount of tissues I will go through with my explanation?

I think they are better off receiving the easiest of all answers...

"Nothing."

And walking away with just a nod, not noticing the tear that trickles down my cheek.

Because

I
am
heartbroken




Submitted on 2006-11-07 23:23:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i've missed reading your poetry, so i thought that i would check out some of the ones that i haven't read yet. this one is very straightforward. it is right to the point and explains a whole world of emotion in only a few words; without overwhelming the reader with too many words. you can feel the sadness in these brief words that you have written down. you have a good way of expressing your emotions without being too overwhelming. i liked it, but i hope you feel better soon. keep your chin up. and take care.
| Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the brevity of this piece.
No more was said than needed, and the emotion of this could still be felt.

Feel better my friend,
B
| Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Beez | [ Reply to This ]
  awww- see, that's expression...
nicely done...
*hands you a tissue*
you've successfully expressed everything without expressing anything.
i love it.

you do have one miss, though...
'meloncholic' should be 'melancholic'.
there's only one 'o'.
:)

other than that, i'd say you have a dandy piece here... ooh- perhaps write a poem for each facet of 'what's wrong'?

sorry, i'm real big on continuing pieces lately...
but i really enjoyed this...
i'm still thinking about the trees...
~Syn
| Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]


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