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    dots Submission Name: The Things I Miss.dots
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    Author: D.C.M.
    ASL Info:    18/M/TN.
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 73/110/77
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       Something written upon remembernig some of the best times I spent with my love, that have come to past. It's not that great, and the flow sucks. Spelling is horid, and puncuation is just as bad. But please bear with it, it shows my heart, and soul.


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    dotsThe Things I Miss.dots
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    I long to kiss your lips into the nite. And to watch your face, appear into the mild light. To hold your hand as we walk the road. While hugging you when the world has gone all wrong. I miss the long moonlight night, out on the peer. Where we walked, hand in hand. Speaking ever so softly, kissing ever so gently. I smile as I gaze upon your hazle eyes. And now our love is gone, into the nite. Never to return. Or show its pleasures. I miss the christmas we spent together, arm in arm, with your parents, like one big, happy, family. That's gone to. Like the winter snow, only this love, will not return.




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      awww. this is so sad. but it was really good. this is going on my favs too.
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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