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    dots Submission Name: Crimsion Sheetsdots
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    Author: D.C.M.
    ASL Info:    18/M/TN.
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 73/110/77
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsCrimsion Sheetsdots
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    Each time I cut my skin
    Another drop hits my pillow.
    I lay my head back down.
    Upon this crimsion pillow.
    Blood still dripping from my wretched veins.
    Staining my silky sheets.
    I slowly fall unconcious.
    Upon these crimsion sheets
    The alarm clock rings.
    Slowly stumbaling toward the shower.
    The scarlet liquid turned to scar.
    And it rinces from my flesh.
    The day goes by,
    I seem fine, until I'm home.
    My razor's deserted no longer.
    Wrapped in my hand.
    "Goodbye!" I scream.
    Slowly falling down.
    Onto these crimsion sheets.




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 08:02:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sure many people can relate to this as can I. We all write for different reasons yet have common reasoning. I enjoyed this one.
    | Posted on 2015-07-26 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. very relatable. ( I don't know if that's a word but thats how I feel when I read this) i LOVED IT!!!
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      crimson scarlet a bloody haze. it's like a drug addiction. now it's all the rage. kids go out and try it. be the star on an empty stage. lol i think it's geting to be like weed everyone's trying it. but nowadays everyone is so seriouse so dramatic. ah well what can ya do. the imagry was great and i liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-02-04 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      good flow good everything i dont know what else to say..lol
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      It was written nicely it had good form, flowed well, but I have to say the repition of crimson was boring. You should mix it up a little, find other words that mean the same thing. Other than that I liked it, except for the self-mutilation. I used to do that, and as then, I think its stupid and without reason. In my opinion, one shouldn't put ugly scars on the beautiful bodies they have. Who wants to see that in fifty years and be reminded of what hurt them in the past. That's all I think of when I see my 113 scars, that and how stupid I was. Sorry for rambling on. Awesome write though, keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

    -Haely
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]


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