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    dots Submission Name: The Worst to Weardots

    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Worst to Weardots

    Wrapped around your fingertips.
    Coming closer, subtle lips.

    With one kiss Iím trapped in you,
    grasping pictures that I drew.

    My body cries, shakes and breaks,
    beneath this innocence you take.

    Dirty love, without much left,
    a girl thatís worth a little less.

    Time still canít erase this scene,
    a vivid wreck and my soul screams.

    With all the things Iíve been thought of,
    what you had, no one can love.

    Submitted on 2006-11-08 08:16:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very pertinent poem and one that only briefly touches the intracacies of a first sexual experience or at worse the experience of being raped.

    LTHM, if this is your own experince then I suggest that you get this guy or woman out of your life as soon as possible, if you are still in association, contact or a relationship wth them!

    It's a less than satisfying first time experience and the distasteful nature of that is very apparent in this piece. From that perspective of viewing/reading this writing it is a fairly emotive piece with a strong poetic relevance!

    I can only tell you that not all sexual experiences are as this was and that should you find the right person with whom you connect on a complete level, you will be mutuality experience the wonderful ecstacy that making love can be!

    Don't give up hope but learn from this now experienced lack of it!
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      wow babe. this [censored] right here was incredible. i loved the hell out of it. it was so true. you are an amazing poet and i'll be checking out some more of your shtuff....so was this from personal experience? well i'm sure half us women out there can relate. check me out and leave me a comment. hearts and hugs!

    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]
      The first experiences can always be awkward because usually we are clueless as to what we are doing and even more clueless as to what it's going to feel like until it happens.

    Your experience here is one of a girl who looses her virginity ( her innocence) and it's tearing her apart now because she realize that it was a mistake and it made her feel less worthy of herself. That experience especially when it was uncontrollable back then since the girl got wrapped around the guy's fingertips (usually a very difficult step to walk away from) is now forced to remember that first time for the rest of her life.

    Hope i got this right. Everyone goes through that especially girls and there is nothing wrong with feeling bad about it. I think girls feel bad about their first times because we have been thought to keep that to ourselves until marriage or more recently until we are sure this is the person we want to share our life with. And sometimes things go wrong and we get carried away, but what we have been taught sticks in our head and so we feel awful about it. I know i did.

    Still, interesting title and the words although not thouroughly described said so much about the concept.

    Take care....

    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, that was my first thought as well. That it was about the first sexual expreience, and that it was bad.

    Elegant looks, and good words!

    Like this piece..

    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds like a girl who lost her virginity. Is that what you meant it to be about? It's so sad that it wasn't a better experience for you. I'm do sorry that this happened...At least if that's what you meant. I felt like that too...~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the emotions you have portraid here. Very vivid. This was almost exactly how I would describe my first time. People expect it to be this wonderful thing when in fact, it isn't. Sex is so dissappointing. You feel used and worthless afterward. Very good write :)


    | Posted on 2006-11-13 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      girl you are amazing. i love this. check my stuff outt.

    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]

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