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    dots Submission Name: As you turned you back to me...dots
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    Author: Burning_Heart
    ASL Info:    21/f/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 5/12/41
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 719
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsAs you turned you back to me...dots
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    I turn to you and smile
    As you turn your back to me
    I turn away and cry
    With you I want to be

    I poke my skin
    As you no longer see me
    I turn to you again
    With the blade deep within

    I try yelling your name
    But I guess itís really over
    I guess it was a game
    So I finally turn away

    You leave me
    As I do what I do
    With blood pouring
    Without you

    Youíre across the road
    And Iím on the other side
    Iím crying
    But I donít show it on the outside

    ďYouíre my everythingĒ
    I have always said
    But I guess I was nothing to you
    And you lied to me instead

    I turned to you and smiled
    As you turned your back to me
    I turned away and cried
    With you I wanted to be

    I poked my skin
    As you could no longer see me
    I turned to you again
    With the blade deep within




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