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    dots Submission Name: for life will not matterdots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1001
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 422



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    dotsfor life will not matterdots
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    When I meet you my heart will shatter
    into a thousand pecies unto the floor.
    I won't pick them up for it will not matter,
    cause you will see then right to my core.
    When i meet you I will gasp for breath but won't catch it,
    it willl feel as if my throat is climbing a ladder.
    When i meet you my heart will shatter,
    into your hands for lfe will not matter.




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 13:17:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      a. i LOVE INVADER ZIM!
    b. i definately can realte
    c. i understand the throat thing.....
    d. keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by bloodyalexander | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem, kinda difficult to follow but good and in depth, spelling could be checked, throat, i enjoyed reading it
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by psycho love | [ Reply to This ]


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