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    dots Submission Name: Beating Heartdots

    Author: Saimi Marie
    ASL Info:    18/f/Columbia, MO
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 42/42/22
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsBeating Heartdots

    We take you for granted beating heart.
    You seem so strong but like a piece of paper you tear with enough prodding.
    You shoot us with an arrow of pain to remind us that life is fragile and with in a moment death's wings can clip it.
    How can a heart that is so full of love and is loved in return be broken?
    Why have we witnessed so many miracles while this went undetected?
    Now we've entered a world where sit and wait in limbo.
    Let us take this time to say a prayer to the beating your heart, O fragile one.

    Submitted on 2006-11-08 13:50:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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