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    dots Submission Name: Lady Morphinedots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1335



    Description:
       girl/drug


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    dotsLady Morphinedots
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    Skip the scenes and walk towards the starlit end.
    Bring lady morphine to me, let her wait at the pews;best friend.
    A ugly boy like him and a pretty girl like her
    a showdown lets pretend.
    Lonely nights and shitty perental fights.
    Run away! run away! so i can be with my friends
    my arms around yours; warmth without an end,
    like kisses to end a war; your godsent.

    Two hearts intertwine, bullet holes and butterflies.
    Mimic my hand and place each finger perfectly met; between mine.
    other boys can't tell you what i've told you,
    other boys don't have these toys
    i perfectly made that given you these joys.
    And other boys fret;
    when i make beautiful noise.

    Torn and abused,
    lets sit misunderstood & misused,
    cry like washingtons has rain,
    Hold me lady morphine smile and take away this pain,
    let run away to a beautiful place,
    we'll give them the longest chase.
    Invisible between grace of yours and mine embrace.

    Other boys can't tell you what i've told you,
    other boys don't have these toys
    i perfectly made that given you these joys.
    And other boys fret;
    when i make beautiful noise.




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 14:06:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was drawn by the title. I don't usually like to read sad poems or poems about drugs for that matter but this one caught my eye and it's safe to say that this is a great piece.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow now that was beautiful...sad yet beautifuly written. teh rhyme and flow was well done. The imagery was awesome, really gave the reader a good image of what is happening in this short yet powerful poem.
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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