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    dots Submission Name: *Deep Agonydots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dots*Deep Agonydots

    Placing on foot in front of the other
    one by one you get closer
    soon I can see your dimples
    the freckle on your check

    but I back away
    cause I donít want to get too close
    last time you touched me I squirmed
    resisting the feel of your hand on my arm
    shuddering at you silky soft skin
    leaving marks of cruelty
    bruising my pale skin

    the closer you come
    the more vivid the memories
    now reliving the horrid moments
    when you molested me
    breaking my heart
    as well as the pedestal
    you so highly stood on

    I turned running from the vicious recollections
    I will never return to you
    you will end up in hell
    and I pity you for that
    one day you will be punished for your behaviour
    but until that day you will run free
    haunting other girls minds
    and destroying their innocence

    Submitted on 2006-11-08 14:28:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A wonderfully powerful piece that seems to achieve its ends by understatement rather than by dwelling on horrors. Sad ,yes, but still forward looking, damning that ogre to hell. I liked it.
    I think this poem gains its power from both the uneven lines and the lack of rhyme. Too powerful a subject to be damned by doggerel rhyming.
    Thank you so much for posting this.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
      I vote for capital punishment! It's time to turn predator into prey. May they rot in snot!
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one incredible and very true write
    To many children not only lose their childhood but their very life to these very sick people
    Most of them will never find True Love because they are afraid of it
    This is so incredibly sad
    California as a state has just passed an innitative it was Prop 83 that puts these Sexual Predators where they have a harder time finding new victims
    I implore every state to follow the lead of California
    This will protect the innocent the ones that need all the help they can get
    The innocent children
    Thank You for sharing this important write
    I will be Praying for the both of you!!!
    God Bless
    Ron Ramonas
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      wow well you definatly got the title right cause i can feel it from here! good write keep it up!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by CFHillyard | [ Reply to This ]

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