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    dots Submission Name: Amendots
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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       HEy when a poem starts to flow, there is no stopping it. so o didn't, and i came up with this. By the way , I'm Agnostic, and dont like the idea of god or gods.


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    dotsAmendots
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    Someone help me please,
    stop the cries inside.
    I'm begging on my knees.
    I really want to die.
    HAnds together tightly,
    lookiing towards the sky.
    I do this ritual nightly,
    always asking why.
    There may not be a being,
    that watches over us.
    A man thats always seeing,
    and laughs at our distrust.
    Whos words lay in a book,
    and chooses if we burn.
    Who never takes a second look,
    our fate is sealed for sure.
    But if there's no jehova,
    no heaven or a hell.
    No angels singing haleluja,
    and no mystic dark tunel.
    Then this ritual is useless,
    and i could pull the trigger.
    End this life of hopelessness,
    and still come out a winner.
    But just in case I'll kneel,
    and start praying once again.
    To save my soul from savage hell,
    I put my pain in an Amen.




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 18:04:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm.. i like this.. it sort of reminds me of myself.. i've been in catholic schools all my life, and i've been through a wandering of investigating other religions and have found my niche.. but i've met a lot of people and have a couple friends who are also agnostic, so i can definatly understand where youre coming from.. i believe in god, but i dont believe that we're going to go to hell if we dont pray or go to church on sundays.. why would god want anything from us? you pose a torturous question that even the most dedicated religious figures have to wonder about sometime.
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by k. rade | [ Reply to This ]


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