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    dots Submission Name: Buddydots

    Author: DrunkOnShadows
    ASL Info:    16/F/Ont
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 66/84/49
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    He was such a lonely boy
    Such a sensitive boy
    Just yearning for affection
    And love he wanted
    Anyone's but mine
    Sometimes I wish I never met him
    He makes no sense to me, not even now
    He's so complex
    It just made me fall right back into love with him again

    But now that's over
    We're great friends
    And he and I are on two different paths
    I'm always there for him
    He confides in me
    And he can always make me laugh
    But he's bringing me down with him
    He's so confused
    And I'm afraid he's falling back into the darkness again

    I hate seeing him suffer
    I want to make everything all better
    I just wish I could take all the pain away
    He doesn't deserve this
    Doesn't deserve the hurt and heartbreak
    Even though he used to break mine nearly everyday
    People wonder why I'm not spiteful
    I can't be spitefull to one I care about so much
    After all, he is my Buddy

    Submitted on 2006-11-08 19:29:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, after just reading your last piece I am extremely disappointed in this.

    This one seems so, sterile I see no depth, feel no emotion.
    It comes across as just a list of traits and situations.

    From what I have seen of your work you have great potential as a writer but I'm afraid this falls decidedly short
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]

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