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    dots Submission Name: Saved me from Myselfdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 941
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    Description:
       This is about my Boyfriend Andy and how he always ends up saving em when i need saving.

    If you have feed back or knwo any thing to help make it better let me know.


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    dotsSaved me from Myselfdots
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    Sometimes I cry so hard
    Tears fall like rain.
    I feel broken and weak
    and as I stear at the ground
    I wish I was laying in my own coffin as I speak.
    I imagined a beautiful dress to bury me in.
    These morbid thoughts make me shake and quiver.
    Is this the end for me?
    As I think of this
    You come to me
    and you lift up my chin
    and kiss me softly.
    As I look up into your eyes
    I know I have your strength.
    All those tears and lies
    Are just taken away
    and the dress I imagin my size
    just burns and crumbles away.
    You grab my hand
    and hold me close.
    OH how I love you
    as you love me
    I know now
    we are meant to be.
    For once again
    You saved me.




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 19:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well...you captured it so well.....I cried....

    Because...my love saved me from myself...I owe my life to him....thanks so much for sharing this.

    Kris
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cuute.
    i liked a lot of things about it.
    the only thing in the write i didn't really understand or like too much was the thing about the dress.
    but everything else was really good.
    i did like how through out the whole thing it was kinda depressed and what not and in the end it was positive and more uplifting.
    with my writing, it's more of the opposite.
    Take Care.

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is realy well done. i can relate very well to this as myself and a close firend of mine have gone through this many times. It is hard and very difficult to come out of with out somone there to help. I love to flow and the way you put so much meaning into it. great work.
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. I can relate very well to this. Oh how I miss my ex and how he used to "rescue" me from myself. I like the flow and rythm. Very good. :)


    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]


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