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    dots Submission Name: Envydots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 577
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    Bytes: 372



    Description:
       A poem about a friend and how she feels as I do


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    dotsEnvydots
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    Envy me,envy you
    There is nothing you can do
    Perfect and pure,that's what you are
    Beautiful skin,unscarred
    You walk with confidence
    I am always on the defence
    I try to be like you
    But secretly knowing it can never be true
    Resentment and envy
    But what's so sad...
    You feel the same about me...




    Submitted on 2006-11-08 20:53:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good one,
    "But what's so sad...
    You feel the same about me..."

    -great way of showing off!
    interesting sequence of narration!
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one!! For some reason it reminds me of my friend and I. Her name is Renae. She is my best friend and I envy her so much. She is so pretty and kind. She can be [censored]y but i will always look past it. She always say's " WHy do you envy me?? I have nothing to envy". But to me she has everything for envy from everyone. I love her body and her face. But she just can't see how B-E-A-U-T-iful she is!! But i can't make her see it. Well good write. You should see my poem called " Envy". Well I LOVE YOU!!!

    I tip my hat....And bid the farwell....

    Luv alway'z...
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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